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Comic - "Charlotte's Magic Life"

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  • SapphireBlueSapphireBlue Posts: 954

    David R said:

    "Try not to get yourself killed."

     

    That's a sweet render, David! Love the lighting on Charlotte's face and the catchlights in her eyes. smiley

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    SapphireBlue said:

    David R said:

    "Try not to get yourself killed."

     

    That's a sweet render, David! Love the lighting on Charlotte's face and the catchlights in her eyes. smiley

    Thanks Blue.  It's an old one from 2 years ago.  heart

     

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 29

    Chapter 10.  A bit of a departure from the main story.  I hope you enjoy!

    https://charlottesmagiclife.com/comic/sophia-the-vignette/

     

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  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 26

    Sweet Nothings

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  • richardandtracyrichardandtracy Posts: 5,663

    Only one thing to say - fabulous posing.

    Two possible tiny mods, his left hand on the counterpane & her left elbow. However it's fabulous as is, evocative and loving without being overt in any way.

    Regards,

    Richard

  • FirstBastionFirstBastion Posts: 7,760

    A gentle intimate portrait of a sweet moment shared between a couple.  

     

    Now the vignette.Certainly a funny moment with a bit of humor, hopefully Charlotte can convince him that a bit of bleach and a hot water cycle should suffice.  Under normal circumstances. Generally speaking. 

  • richardandtracyrichardandtracy Posts: 5,663

    Maybe with some Napisan (In the UK that's the trade name for an oxygen bleach powder originally targetted at in-machine lower temperature sterilisation of toweling nappies [daipers] for babies). We used it extensively for our eldest daughter, but the younger had more sensitive skin and the ammonia from toweling nappies made her bottom raw all the time. Had to stop.

    Regards,

    Richard

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    FirstBastion said:

    A gentle intimate portrait of a sweet moment shared between a couple.  

     

    Now the vignette.Certainly a funny moment with a bit of humor, hopefully Charlotte can convince him that a bit of bleach and a hot water cycle should suffice.  Under normal circumstances. Generally speaking. 

     

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    richardandtracy said:

    Only one thing to say - fabulous posing.

    Two possible tiny mods, his left hand on the counterpane & her left elbow. However it's fabulous as is, evocative and loving without being overt in any way.

    Regards,

    Richard

    Thanks Richard.  I noticed her elbow after posing the hands, and was just too lazy to want to have to re-do any of that. frown

     

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    richardandtracy said:

    Maybe with some Napisan (In the UK that's the trade name for an oxygen bleach powder originally targetted at in-machine lower temperature sterilisation of toweling nappies [daipers] for babies). We used it extensively for our eldest daughter, but the younger had more sensitive skin and the ammonia from toweling nappies made her bottom raw all the time. Had to stop.

    Regards,

    Richard

    When Kurt's grandmother was young she was very poor. She used to boil her father's shirts, because he was a manual laborer and always came home very sweaty, and Kurt, being no laundry expert, just figured that's how it's done.  laugh

    Thanks for the kind words.

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    FirstBastion said:

    A gentle intimate portrait of a sweet moment shared between a couple.  

    Thanks very much! laugh 

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 29

    Chapter 11 "The Source"

    https://charlottesmagiclife.com/comic/sophia-the-source/

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  • SapphireBlueSapphireBlue Posts: 954

    David R Chapter 11! smiley

    Story: Oh dear, Sophie is really ramping it up... What's driving her though? Wish someone would shake some sense into her, tell her off and get her off this path. Ick. You kept the pacing great and ended with such a cliff-hanger. What did he find out about Charlotte's ex-husband?? surprise

    Execution: Wow!! This was a demanding chapter and you really built up the skills to put it together just right. I'm taking notes!
    The shots and shot angles are amazing, showing a careful plan of keeping things varied and really showing the interaction over the phone. From full (angled) shots to close-ups of the face. The interaction is very natural. yes
    Lots of talk this time, so you really tackled the speech bubbles so well!! Love the use of the differentiated bubbles for who is speaking within the panel, in the next panel, on the other side of the phone etc. There was never a confusing spell there, and that's hard with all that conversation. Amazing job! yes

    Clean layouts, great unrushed pacing, differentiated styles of speech for the characters too, careful planning, great posing and expressions as always. David, this is top-notch!! laugh

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    SapphireBlue said:

    David R Chapter 11! smiley

    Story: Oh dear, Sophie is really ramping it up... What's driving her though? Wish someone would shake some sense into her, tell her off and get her off this path. Ick. You kept the pacing great and ended with such a cliff-hanger. What did he find out about Charlotte's ex-husband?? surprise

    Execution: Wow!! This was a demanding chapter and you really built up the skills to put it together just right. I'm taking notes!
    The shots and shot angles are amazing, showing a careful plan of keeping things varied and really showing the interaction over the phone. From full (angled) shots to close-ups of the face. The interaction is very natural. yes
    Lots of talk this time, so you really tackled the speech bubbles so well!! Love the use of the differentiated bubbles for who is speaking within the panel, in the next panel, on the other side of the phone etc. There was never a confusing spell there, and that's hard with all that conversation. Amazing job! yes

    Clean layouts, great unrushed pacing, differentiated styles of speech for the characters too, careful planning, great posing and expressions as always. David, this is top-notch!! laugh

    Thanks so much, Blue! heart  Yes, this one was a challenge. 

  • FirstBastionFirstBastion Posts: 7,760
    edited December 2023

    Wow, there is a serious bit of manipulation going on,  poor fool.  Completely out of his league.  But getting access to confidential documents has really added a sense of precarious threat.  We always knew she was a bit obsessive and unhinged,  but unhinged and smart and manipulative,  now that's a dangerous combination.  Raised stakes is the key to good conflict and dramatic tension.  You know your craft well. 

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  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    FirstBastion said:

    Wow, there is a serious bit of manipulation going on,  poor fool.  Completely out of his league.  But getting access to confidential documents has really added a sense of precarious threat.  We always knew she was a bit obsessive and unhinged,  but unhinged and smart and manipulative,  now that's a dangerous combination.  Raised stakes is the key to good conflict and dramatic tension.  You know your craft well. 

    Thank you FirstBastion.  Yes, Sophia is moving from annoyance to menace. 

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 29

    There won't be any update until January, so I'm posting this little teaser of chapter 12. 

    What is Sophia up to?

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  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 26

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  • SapphireBlueSapphireBlue Posts: 954

    David R I thought it high time I spend some more time in the Art Studio forums and what do I see??? I can't believe you have a teaser in here for your next chapter and never let us know!! surprise 

    What a surprise, that Sophia is up to no good. Sigh. She's putting me through more suspense than I want to handle... frown That gentleman in the elevator's expressions and poses are so good, and so are Sophia's subtle but very incriminating looks in the last two panels. WHAT is she up to?? surprise

     

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    SapphireBlue said:

    David R I thought it high time I spend some more time in the Art Studio forums and what do I see??? I can't believe you have a teaser in here for your next chapter and never let us know!! surprise 

     

     

    Hey, Blue!  Well, discord was kinda dead and I just wanted to throw this in because it was gonna be a while before I finished the chapter.  When you see what Sophia is up to it will baffle you and eventually enrage you.  But I'm betting before all this is over you'll feel a little bit sorry for her. broken heart 

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 26

    Chapter 12 - "The Crime"
    https://charlottesmagiclife.com/comic/sophia-the-crime/

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  • FirstBastionFirstBastion Posts: 7,760
    edited January 19

    I really liked the pacing of the panels, her face reactions, checking both ways,   it gave a sense of movement and time,  as we followed Sophia towards her dastardly deeds.  She really has some wires crossed up there. I know we live in a day and age when we are supposed to have more understand for people dealing with turmoil, but yah. Arson be bad.  Always.   Does she not notice all the other housing units across the courtyard,  in broad daylight,  potentially watching her,  doing her thing?  

    btw,  thanks for putting that large exterior assembled condo background to use.  

     

    oh yah,  kudos on the oblivious guy in the elevator.  That's how half the trouble in the world happens;  people not really paying attention to whats going on around them. 

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  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    FirstBastion said:

    Does she not notice all the other housing units across the courtyard,  in broad daylight,  potentially watching her,  doing her thing?  

     

    Yes, that will be a problem for her, without giving too much away. laugh

    Thanks for your kind words. 

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290
    edited February 26

    Chapter 13 The Phone Call
    https://charlottesmagiclife.com/comic/sophia-the-phone-call/

    Charlotte and Kurt now have their own website you can find here https://charlottesmagiclife.com or by clicking the banner below,  so this is officially a real webcomic! laugh

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  • FirstBastionFirstBastion Posts: 7,760

    Congratulations.  

  • carrie58carrie58 Posts: 3,982

    very nice !!

  • Fae3DFae3D Posts: 2,557

    When I click on either of the links, I get a page that says "This connection is not private.  This website may be impersonating "charlottesmagiclife.com" to steal your personal or financial information.  You should close this page."  Then there is no way to continue.  I've never had a problem with this before.  I'm very sad, I really want to know how this story goes, I'm totally hooked!

  • FirstBastionFirstBastion Posts: 7,760

    Tried the site with both Firefox and Edge, and no warnings pop up.  

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    Fae3D said:

    When I click on either of the links, I get a page that says "This connection is not private.  This website may be impersonating "charlottesmagiclife.com" to steal your personal or financial information.  You should close this page."  Then there is no way to continue.  I've never had a problem with this before.  I'm very sad, I really want to know how this story goes, I'm totally hooked!

    Oh no!  I'm really sorry you're having problems with the website, Fae3D.  Try typing in https://charlottesmagiclife.com and see if that works.  If not I will continue to post to dropbox as well as the website.  Unfortunatley,  I burnt out a fan on my main pc and it is in the shop right now. sad  Should have it by the end of the week. Don't worry, I won't leave you hanging.  I really value your readership! laugh

  • David RDavid R Posts: 290

    carrie58 said:

    very nice !!

    Thanks! 

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